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    Quote Originally Posted by Zymologist View Post
    Thanks for the interest, everyone!

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    Quote Originally Posted by TheWall View Post
    I got a very Lovecraft Ian feel from that. I like it.
    Awesome, thank you!
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    Quote Originally Posted by MaxVel View Post
    First impression: I enjoyed it. If it was the opening chapter in a book, I'd want to read more. Reminded me a bit of Larry Correia's 'Monster Hunter' series.

    I'll re-read and give you a more detailed response soon.
    Good news, thanks! I've heard of the Monster Hunter series, but never read them. Would you recommend them?
    Hofstadter's Law: It will always take longer than you expect, even if you take into account Hofstadter's Law.

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    I think we should change the title of this thread to "with much excitement".


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    Quote Originally Posted by mossrose View Post
    I think we should change the title of this thread to "with much excitement".
    The story intrigued me and caught me, so count me excited

    After reading it once (and the intro a second time for clarity), it looks great!
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    Quote Originally Posted by Bisto View Post
    The story intrigued me and caught me, so count me excited

    After reading it once (and the intro a second time for clarity), it looks great!
    Thank you!

    If anybody wants to know some of the backstory of how this came about....

    I've been working on writing for ~4 years now, cycling through several increasingly less-awful ideas. None of them have really worked. A friend and I decided to brainstorm an idea for a novel one day, and we came up with something that I thought was pretty cool. So I started a short story that was intended purely as backstory for my/our own purposes--trying to get a handle on the setting, some characters, etc. I called it "Some Kind of Coward," and I actually liked it enough that I decided to write a sequel short story.

    Then, after talking to the friend (who told me to just run with the novel as if it was my own), I decided to turn those into chapters 1 and 2, which turned into chapters 1 and 3. The rest started filling out from there.

    So this chapter 1 was at first a short story--largely the same as it is now, only more vague and not as good IMO.

    I like chapter 2 a lot, although there's one particular detail that I want to describe a lot differently. But if you're interested...chapter 2 is from Lawrence's POV, and it's about them going down there. Happens concurrently with the end of chapter 1. Chapter 3 was my original chapter 2, which basically deals with the fallout of the events of 1 and 2.
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    My chapter titles are something of a gimmick that I've been pretty excited about. The title is a one-word descriptor for a key character in that chapter, but the title may be misleading. It might refer to one person from a certain character's perspective (which may therefore be inaccurate), it might refer to more than one person/thing, it might be deceptive in that it appears to refer to one person but in fact refers to another, etc. There are a couple of these that I'm wrestling with, but overall I think I've got most of them titled. Here are the chapter titles:

    Coward
    Fool
    Killer
    Fraud <--this chapter is very rough, and the title doesn't really work
    Visionary
    Murderer
    Sadist
    Punisher
    Defender
    Mercenary
    Liar
    Monster
    Wretch
    Rescuer <--I want to change this one, not sure how yet
    Thief <--all the chapters up through this one are nominally complete
    Martyr <--got this chapter started, the next two are all that remains *fingers crossed*
    Hero
    Epilogue: Brother & Slave
    Hofstadter's Law: It will always take longer than you expect, even if you take into account Hofstadter's Law.

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    So, shall I "fix" the title, Zym?


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    Quote Originally Posted by mossrose View Post
    So, shall I "fix" the title, Zym?
    Any suggestions for either of those would be great. "Rescuer" is kinda-sorta close to what that chapter needs, but the word isn't quite right. "Fraud" is a different matter; the chapter needs real work to fix that title. You've read it, so you might have an idea what I mean.
    Hofstadter's Law: It will always take longer than you expect, even if you take into account Hofstadter's Law.

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