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    Truly Bad Writing...

    In a romance novel...whenever he and she looked at each other....

    "Their eyes tangled"

    Me: *snort* *groan*

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    That sounds like the sort of thing that Snoopy might write.
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    Maybe she meant "Their eyes Tangoed"

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    Quote Originally Posted by The Melody Maker View Post
    That sounds like the sort of thing that Snoopy might write.
    It has been awhile since I have read Snoopy's writings

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    I like the Romance of Homer and Jethro better....

    I cocked my eye at her
    she cocked her eye at me
    and we just stood there
    cockeyed as could be.
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    He was tall, like a Christmas tree that was six feet eight inches high.
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    Quote Originally Posted by KingsGambit View Post
    He was tall, like a Christmas tree that was six feet eight inches high.
    That, believe it or not, is very nearly word for word what I came across in a different novel that I promptly unborrowed (Kindle Unlimited).

    But...tangling eyes sounds so....violent.

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    Quote Originally Posted by DesertBerean View Post
    In a romance novel...whenever he and she looked at each other....

    "Their eyes tangled"

    Me: *snort* *groan*
    You proved bad writing with just the words "In a romance novel"


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    Quote Originally Posted by Sparko View Post
    You proved bad writing with just the words "In a romance novel"

    Bad EVEN for a romance novel...

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    ~ Russell ("MelMak")

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